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How Fortuna Saved the Universe (17/24)

Title - How Fortuna Saved the Universe (17/24)
Author - [livejournal.com profile] earlgreytea68   
Rating - General
Characters - Nine, Ten, Eleven, Jack, OCs
Spoilers - Through "A Christmas Carol," just to be safe.
Disclaimer - I don't own them and I don't make money off of them, but I don't like to dwell on that, so let's move on. (Except for the kids, they're all mine.)
Summary - Fortuna gets her story. And it's pretty timey-wimey.
Author's Notes - Huge thanks to Kristin, [livejournal.com profile] chicklet73 [livejournal.com profile] chicklet73 , and [livejournal.com profile] lorelaisquared , who all talked through plot points and gave early drafts once-overs. And, last but not least, everlasting thanks to [livejournal.com profile] chicklet73 [livejournal.com profile] chicklet73   for beta-ing, with flair.    

The icon was created by [livejournal.com profile] swankkat , commissioned by [livejournal.com profile] jlrpuck   for my birthday.

Prologue - Ch. 1 - Ch. 2 - Ch. 3 - Ch. 4 - Ch. 5 - Ch. 6 - Ch. 7 - Ch. 8 - Ch. 9 - Ch. 10 - Ch. 11 - Ch. 12 - Ch. 13 - Ch. 14 - Ch. 15


 

Chapter Sixteen

His TARDIS was on its side. That much was clear from Brem’s position against the wall. The other thing that was clear, though, was his father, in his head, as safe and solid a presence as he always had been. Brem, at an uncomfortable angle squashed against the wall, closed his eyes briefly in relief. When he opened them again, he was just about to tackle the effort of climbing up to where the door of his TARDIS was when a voice over to his left said, “Blimey, are you a terrible driver.”

Brem turned his head and stared at Leather Jacket. “You’re still here!”

“Where’d you think I was going to go?”

“You were supposed to vanish.”

Leather Jacket glared at him, rubbing the back of his head. “Sorry I didn’t oblige you that way.”

Brem shook his head a bit. “Doesn’t matter. Dad’ll know what to do,” he decided, confidently, and then he started clambering his way up the tipped, tilted floor over to his door.

“Do you always land sideways?” Leather Jacket complained.

“No, not always,” Brem responded, sourly. Now that he was close to having his regular father back, he was feeling less inclined to be nice to Leather Jacket. “Sometimes I land upside-down entirely.” Brem tried his door, tentatively. At the angle he was at, it was difficult to get enough purchase to pull it open, since it had appeared to get a bit bent upon impact.

“Do you really?” Leather Jacket asked behind him, appalled.

“Of course not,” Brem replied. “Anyway, you taught me how to drive, so I wouldn’t be too smug, if I were you.” Brem tugged hard at the door, and it flew open, and he managed not to lose his grip on the railing.

His father’s head immediately appeared in the doorway. Brem tried to think if he’d ever been so relieved to see him. “Brem,” he said. “You’re sideways.”

“Yes, I know, it’s a bit self-evident from my position. Help, please?” He was struggling to clamber out of the sideways doorway.

His father pulled at him, and he managed to go over the side of the doorway and land in a heap, but he was barely even noticing landing in awkward positions anymore.

“Are you alright?” his father asked, pulling him up.

Brem didn’t answer. He hugged him fiercely instead, closing his eyes and concentrating on burrowing into the warmth of his father’s presence in his mind.

“Oh,” his father said in surprise, and then let him, hugging him back inside and outside. “You’re okay now,” he told him, and brushed a kiss over his head. “We’ll fix it.”

Brem nodded into his shoulder, feeling suddenly ashamed that he was acting like a four-year-old. He straightened, stepping back. “Where’s everyone else?” he asked, because the rest of his head was still silent and empty.

“How’d you get here?” his father asked him, simultaneously.

Leather Jacket abruptly landed in an unceremonious heap at their feet.

“Don’t worry about me,” he drawled up at them. “I’m fine.”

His father blinked down at him, and then looked at Brem.

Brem rubbed the back of his neck. “He kind of tagged along.”

“Tagged along?” Leather Jacket struggled his way to his feet. “You kidnapped me.”

Brem wasn’t paying attention to him. Brem had noticed the other people in the control room, who were all staring at him, speechless.

“Who are they?” he asked his father, and then, for the first time, he realized exactly what the control room looked like. “And what the hell happened in here?” he demanded.

“I re-decorated,” said the strange man in a bowtie, defensively. “And I happen to like it, young man, I’ll have you know.”

Brem stared at him. Then he said, slowly, “Dad, what…?”

“Yeah, I think we’ve got a lot to catch up on,” his father agreed.

***

Matt had reached a decision.

His baby was dying. He didn’t know why—he couldn’t understand it—but it was happening. None of the normal human reasons seemed to make any sense. All he knew was that his frantic child had worn himself out inside of Athena, was somehow bleeding Athena dry of nutrients, and yet was fading in front of him. And he was taking Athena with him. Whatever was wrong seemed to be very wrong, and he couldn’t allow it to kill both of them.

And help wasn’t coming.

Matt called everyone he could think of, twice more. Nothing. No one responded. He walked out to the control room and spoke to the TARDIS. The TARDIS liked him, Athena had told him, more than once. And he knew the TARDIS adored Athena.

“Where is everyone else?” Matt asked the TARDIS. “Can you get me to anyone else?”

The TARDIS hummed at him, a hum Matt had no trouble interpreting. It was apologetic, and sad, and scared. The TARDIS was as scared as he was. He stood there for a second, feeling very alone. He wished he could go get Jackie. This is going to sound crazy, but I’m eventually going to marry your daughter’s daughter, and do you mind sitting with me while I deliver your great-grandson, I don’t really want to be alone.

The TARDIS hummed again, more comfortingly, and Matt nodded at her in acknowledgment and drew a hand down the wall. He wasn’t alone, not entirely.

Matt turned back, walked back to the infirmary. He looked at the readings on every machine. And then he left again. He knew he had every state-of-the-art piece of the equipment back in that infirmary, but, if he was going to have to perform surgery, he needed to do it with the regular instruments he’d been trained on.

He retrieved the human surgical instruments and brought them into the infirmary. He sterilized them and scrubbed himself. Then he stood by Athena and watched the monitor of the baby’s heartsbeats, until it hit the danger zone and a high-pitched whine sounded through the infirmary.

Then Matt took a deep breath, and began.

***

Nobody at Torchwood really paid them much attention as they landed there, and Fortuna wondered if Jack had warned them.

“Two TARDISes in one week,” Jack proclaimed, jovially, walking over to them with arms outstretched. “Lucky us.”

“Hi, Jack,” said Fortuna, and accepted his hug.

“Hello, beautiful,” he replied, and kissed the top of her head. “Going to solve this mess with me?”

“Of course.” She stepped back and indicated Sylvain. “This is Sylvain. Sylvain, this is Jack.”

“Sylvain San Broglio,” Jack said, shaking his hand.

Both Sylvain and Fortuna blinked.

“Sorry,” Sylvain said, “do I…?”

“We never met. I only know you from reputation. We used to work for the same people.”

“The Time Agency?” Sylvain clarified.

“Yes,” Jack confirmed, and then grinned. “And now, I hear, we’re both rogue.”

“How do you know that?”

“Because they are out looking for you in force. But don’t worry, you’re safe here.” Jack was walking away. “Ioan—” he called out.

“Tea,” a man called back to him. “Yes. I know.”

“You’re a doll,” Jack replied, and winked. “Come here,” he said to Fortuna and Sylvain, and then as they walked, to Sylvain, “That coat? Really? A bit showy, isn’t it? And it’s not going to be marketed for another thousand years, what made you think you could blend in with it?” Before Sylvain could defend himself, they entered a room with a large and complicated-looking computer. “I want you to see these readings.”

Sylvain regarded it with interest. “You’re sitting on a rift,” he realized.

“You’re smart,” Jack said. “I like you. Keep this one, Fort. Normally Fortuna dates some…” Jack waved his hand back and forth, as if to indicate her choices in men were questionable.

“Ignore him,” Fortuna rejoined, good-naturedly, and stepped forward to the computer, peering more closely. “This is a mess,” she said.

“How did it get so tangled?” Sylvain asked. “It’s like one big knot.”

“It looks to me like a chrono-trap,” Jack answered. “Gets time all in a jumble like that, until you don’t know which way is up. Or which timeline is real.”

“It was a chrono-trap,” Fortuna confirmed, not taking her eyes off of the screen. “That’s what the Master said.”

“Who?”

“The Master, he’s behind this.”

“Who’s that?”

“My father’s, you know, nemesis. He never mentioned him?”

“Your father doesn’t mention important things,” Jack pointed out.

“True.” She straightened away from the computer. “So that’s where everyone else is, trapped on different timelines?”

“Yeah. I think so, anyway. If you can’t feel them…”

“This is the real timeline,” Fortuna announced.

Jack shook his head. “You can’t know that for sure.”

“I know it. I’m the key, I’m the one who imploded the chrono-trap.”

You imploded it?”

“I thought it was a black hole.”

“Oh,” Jack said, dead-pan. “That’s better, then.”

“If this is the real timeline, how do I get my family back?”

“I have no idea,” Jack admitted. “I’ve never dealt with a chrono-trap before. I’ve never seen one, just read about them in basic training.”

“You need to pull the dangling thread,” Sylvain said, and pointed to one of the readings on the monitor. “That thread, there.”

“But what does that thread correspond to?” Fortuna asked, looking at the reading. “How will we ever figure it out?”

“I’ve no idea. But that’s your key, the moment in time protected by that reading.”

“He’ll have it blocked, of course, this Master guy,” Jack commented. “I mean, if he’s any good, he’ll try to keep you from getting anywhere near that trigger point.”

“Is it Versailles, do you think?” Fortuna asked Sylvain, looking at him. “The moment when I interrupted my father?”

Sylvain shook his head. “I don’t think so. A chrono-trap can’t be undone by undoing something that happened after the chrono-trap weakened the timelines and made them susceptible to this mess. There’s a prior moment in time, from before the chrono-trap, that would have to be undone.”

Fortuna looked at Sylvain for a long moment.

He sensed her finally, looking away from the monitor to meet her gaze, his quizzical in response. “What?”

“Nothing,” she managed, and looked away from him, to Jack. “I need to get to my family.”

“They’re on all different timelines at the moment, according to you, and I have no idea how we’d find any of them.”

“I wouldn’t recommend getting to them anyway,” Sylvain interjected.

“What? Why?”

“Because if we’re on the real timeline—and I think you’re right that we are—you don’t want to risk crossing the real timeline onto a fake one. It could make the fake timeline the real one, and vice versa. We need to come up with a way to get your family here.”

“Well, that’s a good thing, then,” Fortuna remarked.

“Why do you say that?”

“Because my family will get here. If there’s a way to be found, they’ll find it.”

Sylvain stuck his hands in his pockets. “Does that mean we’re just going to wait?”

Fortuna smiled at him fondly and looked at Jack. “He’s terrible at waiting.”

“Time Agents usually just jump forward in time, rather than wait,” Jack explained.

“Exactly.”

“Have you ever seen Cardiff, Sylvain?” Fortuna asked him.

“Why would I ever see Cardiff?” Sylvain responded, blankly.

Fortuna smiled at him again and took his hand. “Let’s go.”

Next Chapter

 


[identity profile] frakup.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:00 am (UTC)(link)
AAAAAAAAUUUUUUUUUGH! Driving me batty, you are!

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:15 am (UTC)(link)
I do it on purpose, you know.

[identity profile] beatlejessie.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:08 am (UTC)(link)
That's IT!?!??!?!

You are EVIL!!! That is all.

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:22 am (UTC)(link)
It's true, I am. :-)

[identity profile] jackspinkpearl.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:10 am (UTC)(link)
This is EVIL. But so, so, SO good. I love how far this family has come. <3

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:22 am (UTC)(link)
They really have come an amazing distance, haven't they? I seldom really think about that, but it's true.

[identity profile] glorious-clio.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:18 am (UTC)(link)
BABY NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Poor Matt. Poor poor Matt. <3

That's all I have to say.

*refresh refresh refresh* I'm glad Brem reached the Doctor, though. That's a small relief.

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:23 am (UTC)(link)
Ah, the torture is exquisite, trust me.

[identity profile] sapphire-child.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:33 am (UTC)(link)
I'm meant to be writing an essay! But, but, but...

Brem and Ten! And Nine didn't disappear! Whoooooo. I admit, I lolled when he rolled out of the TARDIS grumping about everything and everyone else was just like "...um. Lolwhut?!" I can just imagine Eleven's reaction too trolololololol XD XD XD

And oh Fortuna...I love that she's taking Sylvain on a guided tour of Cardiff lollllllll. That is such a ROSE thing to do. "Multiverse possibly ending, screwed up timestreams, major angst? Let's go for a walk and get chips!"

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:23 am (UTC)(link)
I aid procrastination!

Poor Nine, he's got all these annoying incarnations around him. :-)

And YES, it's the Rose parts of Fortuna totally shining through, there.
ext_11604: (Dollhouse-Sierra/Victor Sleeping)

[identity profile] effulgent-girl.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:40 am (UTC)(link)
9, 10 & 11 all together. And Brem. I suspect lots of hilarity there.
Ack! Matt has to deliver a time lord baby on his own!? Please don't let anything go wrong with Theenie or the baby.
I have a sinking feeling that the thing she has to undo is Sylvain. Mostly cause of this There’s a prior moment in time, from before the chrono-trap, that would have to be undone.”
Fortuna looked at Sylvain for a long moment.
He sensed her finally, looking away from the monitor to meet her gaze, his quizzical in response. “What?”
“Nothing,” she managed"
I like him. I don't want anything to happen to him:(

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:24 am (UTC)(link)
There are a lot of strong personalities all in one place here.

[identity profile] othermewriter.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:53 am (UTC)(link)
I really am afraid that Sylvian is going to the piece that will need to be undone and that very much saddens me because I suspect that he & Fortuna would make a smashing couple (they have so far).

Poor poor Matt, what a trial being married to a Time Lady! I just know that he will get things resolved before disaster completely implodes his life.

Brem, 9, 10 AND 11 oh I can't wait to see the banter there! I felt so very sorry for him and 10 both when 10 suddenly understands what has so unnerved his most of the time unflappable son. 10 never did want to have any of his children ever to have to experience that, and now all of them will know exactly how lonely he was.

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:25 am (UTC)(link)
Matt knew he was signing up for a challenging life when he married Athena, but I don't think he had any idea it might come to the situation he finds himself in.

"Unflappable" is a good word to describe Brem. You are right to point out that, when Brem is frightened, it terrifies the Doctor. And you're also right to point out that now they all know exactly what it feels like to be all alone in the universe.

[identity profile] morningroses.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 04:06 am (UTC)(link)
Ahhh! You're killing me! Seriously, I'd die except then I wouldn't get to read the next chapter!
<3

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:37 am (UTC)(link)
No! Stay alive! You have to finish the story!

[identity profile] see-a-panther.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 05:15 am (UTC)(link)
Aw - loved the moment with Brem finally letting himself fold a little bit and letting his father(s) deal with the problem. And poor Athena, who usually seems the most stable of everyone... You have me wracking my brain as to what this special moment is that will be the thread that can undo the mess. I'll have to ponder and see if I guess right.

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:38 am (UTC)(link)
Poor Brem. He thinks he's too old for it--he's thought he's too old for it since he was four--but sometimes he still just needs his dad.

It's true, Athena usually does seem to be the most stable, I guess it makes sense that I put her out of commission entirely!

[identity profile] aceofannwn.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 05:30 am (UTC)(link)
*cackles*
So, I thought the Brem + chaosverse!Ten +Eleven meeting was going to be brilliant... and then NINE was there too!!!
*throws arms out in paroxysm of excessive joy*

You are FANTASTIC!

[identity profile] aceofannwn.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 05:32 am (UTC)(link)
Also, I'm glad to see Brem continuing the Doctor's tradition of dealing with multi-Doctor paradoxes by making them even more complicated XD

[identity profile] cjk1701.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 10:06 am (UTC)(link)
Wait, hang on -- how can this be the real timeline if Jack doesn't know who the Master is? Or has the Master changed it somehow? Or is this not the real Jack? Is it another trap? Didn't Jack meet the Master in the Chaosverse?

*flaps her arms and panics* Don't leave us hanging like this!!!!

[identity profile] trialanderror12.livejournal.com 2011-05-31 12:15 am (UTC)(link)
Having just read the entire series in its entirety, I'm pretty sure I can answer this question--those with more knowledge can correct me if I'm wrong : ) But as far as I recall, the Master parted ways with them after they saved him from the re-time-locking-Gallifrey (the Doctor was right to say he'd regret doing that!), an event at which Jack was not present. So I believe that explains it!

[identity profile] kellywiag.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 10:07 am (UTC)(link)
Sometimes you just need a hug from your Da!
~
Poor Matt, Poor Theenie, Poor Baby, Poor TARDIS!

Whats happened to Rose and her travelling TARDIS?

Oh woman, this is almost oo much for me to bear! its so bloody brilliant!

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:46 am (UTC)(link)
Sometimes you just need a hug from your Da! <--words to live by

I'm glad you're enjoying!

[identity profile] aadarshinah.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 10:20 am (UTC)(link)
This is just... so awesome (but drawing out the Nine-Ten-Eleven-Brem hilarity like this is just *cruel*) and far too short. A week is too long to wait for more!

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:47 am (UTC)(link)
I am cruel, it's true.

[identity profile] karit.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 11:27 am (UTC)(link)
Ohhh, please don't let Sylvain be the dangling thread. I really like Sylvain! (And so does Fortuna, which I suppose is the more important thing!)

And Nine + Ten + Eleven + BREM?! I NEED MORE OF THIS!

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:47 am (UTC)(link)
Ha! I'll see if I can arrange for more for you. :-)

[identity profile] dudewithak.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 11:51 am (UTC)(link)
OOOOOHHHHH! Great Chapter! Totally worth getting up early to read! So, all three doctors? A doctor reunion? Or un-union? Please update soon!

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:47 am (UTC)(link)
I'm happy it was worth getting up early!

[identity profile] valiant-queene.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 02:06 pm (UTC)(link)
*incoherent squeals of flailing*

I have every confidence in Matt that he will be able to whatever it is that he is doing. Is he delivering the baby?

And what is going on with Rose?!? GAH! Is it next week yet?

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:48 am (UTC)(link)
I will answer no questions! Next installment tomorrow! ;-)

[identity profile] hence-the-name.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 02:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh no! The loose thread is totally the first time Fortuna saw Sylvain in Paris. She HAS to find away around undoing that.

Also: three Doctors, plus Brem! <3

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:54 am (UTC)(link)
3 Doctors + 1 Brem = AWESOME, right?
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[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:55 am (UTC)(link)
I am going to give no hints!

[identity profile] flyninthetardis.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 03:39 pm (UTC)(link)
for the first time, he realized exactly what the control room looked like. “And what the hell happened in here?” he demanded.

“I re-decorated,” said the strange man in a bowtie, defensively. “And I happen to like it, young man, I’ll have you know.”


i have to admit, the new TARDIS is the one thing i like about season five.
great chapter by the way, though it lookse like Fort's gotta think of something fast.

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:56 am (UTC)(link)
I actually like the new TARDIS as well, but I figure Brem would be completely thrown by it.

[identity profile] susanb03.livejournal.com 2011-05-26 11:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Moving forward! But aaaaaaagh end it there?????

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:56 am (UTC)(link)
Yup, I'm just that evil. ;-)
captaintish: (Dr. Who -- 9th Doctor)

[personal profile] captaintish 2011-05-27 01:17 am (UTC)(link)
Nine, Ten, and Eleven in one room? I LOVE IT!!

Poor Matt -- all alone. But at least he's got the TARDIS.

Love this story. :D

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:57 am (UTC)(link)
Nine, Ten, Eleven...and Brem!

Glad you're enjoying the story!

[identity profile] maniacalshen.livejournal.com 2011-05-27 03:18 am (UTC)(link)
Yay for the father/son reunion. :) And I kind of forgot that Jack doesn't even know the Master in this 'verse... it's sort of startling to think about.

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:58 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, I kept thinking I couldn't be right, even as I was writing that, but I'm pretty sure that Jack and the Master have never crossed paths before in my 'verse.

[identity profile] stormwolf10.livejournal.com 2011-05-28 05:45 am (UTC)(link)
Nine, Ten, and Eleven...together...

Wow, I'm not sure I can handle the suspense!

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:59 am (UTC)(link)
The suspense is terrible, but you hope it lasts! ;-)

[identity profile] seraangel.livejournal.com 2011-05-29 12:46 pm (UTC)(link)
The three doctors! I admit that I totally want them to do a Three Doctor's episode in NuWho now that they've got three doctors they could do it with. And Jack! I love his comment about Fort's other boyfriends. Hee.

[identity profile] earlgreytea68.livejournal.com 2011-06-01 02:59 am (UTC)(link)
Why don't they do a multi-Doctor episode? I'm desperate for them to!

I figure Jack has been a sort of benevolent judge of the girls' boyfriends, like an uncle or something.

[identity profile] trialanderror12.livejournal.com 2011-05-31 12:11 am (UTC)(link)
Oh. Oh my. That...wow.

*takes a moment to compose self* I've just spent all my spare time the last three or four days reading this 'verse in its entirety, and okay, wow. I honestly don't even know where to begin. To start with, thank you so much for giving the Doctor a future where he can be so incredibly happy. He so deserves it. I just love this beautiful world you've created... There are authors who can make OCs interesting and part of the story, but never have I read any as vivid as yours. That you can take these children and make me want to read about just them, all by themselves, and enjoy it so much, is an amazing and wonderful thing. This is canon, you understand? Canon. This is how it should have gone. The Doctor and Rose, happy, with this wonderfully dimensional and vibrant children, who I love for both the bits of Rose and the Doctor I see in them and also just for themselves. There are so many moments in this story that I adore that it would take longer to list them out than it did to read it all... You do such a wonderful job of making this seem real. The alien planets and creatures and technologies etc. that you come up with just reinforce this world in my mind--I feel like I could be watching an episode of the show, that I'm really seeing what their universe is like. There's nothing wrong with bringing back old races/villains, but that you have such creativity and invent new ones with such frequency just makes it all more realistic. I feel like I'm watching them explore the universe--which is of course the way their lives should always be. I love the little details you add in, alien or not--the things that make it feel like they're people living real lives, apart from the aliens-in-spaceships thing. So often in stories and even shows things are so very plot-driven. You have the rare ability to strike a balance between a character-driven story that also has a beautifully crafted plot, and you also throw the details in there that make them real people. I don't remember which story it was in, but there was a line about Rose going through a phase where she was putting lots of plants in the console room, and the Doctor wasn't too fond of it... And I just had to stop and think, wow. Because you're writing them, and you're writing their story, and you've got the plot, but you've also got things like that. The bits that say yeah, they live a pretty unusual life, but they're still people, and there are all these little things going on that are completely ordinary and don't really need to be discussed further, but... They're there. The little things they do. And that's just wonderful, because there are many who can tell a story, but few who can chronicle a life like this. I feel like I get to peek in on small pieces of the Doctor's fully-formed life, and in each snapshot I get to see the remnants of everything that has been and hints toward what will come, and that's just amazing for me. So thank you, thank you, for writing these stories.

[Okay, LJ is cutting my comment intp pieces...haha. Will post the rest in reply.]

[identity profile] trialanderror12.livejournal.com 2011-05-31 12:12 am (UTC)(link)
I love your brilliantly thought-out plots, too, because I can almost never predict what's going to happen next! A lot of times you read something and you know what's coming, or if something surprises you it's because it was completely out of left field and so it doesn't feel like something's been plotted around you, it just feels like it popped out of nowhere. That's one of the things I love about Doctor Who--you can just see, as you near the end of a season, all the little hints and breadcrumbs they dropped along the way that just make sense now that you know what it was all leading up to. And then you feel like going back and rewatching all the episodes to find all the little things that make sense and that you can't believe you didn't catch in the first place but were really never going to. And that's how I feel when reading your chaptered fics in this 'verse--like I'm being taken along on a crazy, amazing roller-coaster ride, and I can sit here and guess all I like but in the end it's going to be something so much better and more well-plotted than I could imagine, and so I ought to just sit back and enjoy the ride. (Doesn't actually stop me from guessing, though--in those first moments when she saw Sylvain in the prologue, before the other her said is name, I was so sure he was regenerated!future!Brem. It was the line about the great hair--I thought, all of the Doctor's children will have to have great hair, in any regeneration. They were made from Ten, after all. *grin* But yeah, obviously that's not what happened, and it was loads better. As always. :) )

As I was reading the college story I kept thinking...as much as Brem doesn't like to be told he's like his father, I can so picture this as being exactly how the Doctor would have acted if he'd been raised with love and been given freedom and fallen in love this way. I was almost hearing Tennant's voice in my head for some of his lines, he was acting so much like his father! But of course there were also moments where his own personality, so like the Doctor's but at the same time so different, shone through. Like when he first told Kate he loved her--he hesitated, it took him a moment, but he said it relatively quickly after she did. And I thought, way to go, Brem. That, at least, you can know is very you--your dad would have taken an awful lot longer to admit it. At that point I think I'd fallen a bit into expecting Brem to be more like the Doctor, just like everyone around him--I was honestly surprised that he told her, then. And that just made me look back and think of all the ways he does differ from his father, and to be more cognizant of the ways he was in the future.

As I've said, so many separate and individual instances and lines in these stories that slayed me--in happy ways, in thoughtful ways, in oh-god-my-heart ways... So many different things. But right now, just having finished reading them all, the ones that stick out the very most in my memory are these:

Jack, every single time he appeared/was mentioned when they were kids. Every. single. time. God, but especially right before they met him, I think--that was so utterly beyond brilliant. The handsomest man in the universe, the Doctor not standing a chance in a fight against him, Brem's "Mum, he's wearing clothes".... Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. I love Jack, of course, but the way you write him and the way you have the children and the Doctor interact with him is just...gah. Wonderful. Made me burst out in giggles with every line. : )

[Third and hopefully final part of comment coming soon. Silly LJ making me paste this in pieces..haha]

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